Writing task 2 8.5+ 8999 telling a person s character from his clothes

While clothing can offer certain clues, I am convinced that it is not a definitive indicator of a person''''s cultural background or personality.On the one hand, it is understandable why so

Overall band score 8.5 8+9+9+9

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WRITING TASK 2

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task

Write about the following topic:

Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Write at least 250 words

Original answer -

It is often believed that people's choice of clothing reveals significant information about their culture and character While clothing can offer certain clues, I am convinced that it is not a definitive indicator of a person's cultural background or personality

On the one hand, it is understandable why some claim that individuals’ cultural backgrounds and personality traits can be reflected in their clothing choices As for the former, traditional garments often reflect cultural heritage and values The Japanese kimono or Indian saree, for instance, are emblematic of their respective cultures In addition to this, an individual's clothing style can also reflect their personality traits, as seen in the way a preference for flamboyant attire normally indicates a confident, outgoing character Considering these factors, it is safe to say that people’s choices of clothing items are a reliable indicator of their culture and characters

However, I am convinced that the aforementioned arguments are generally

questionable at best The first reason is that the increasingly interconnected world we live in has led to the globalization of fashion trends, blurring the lines between distinct cultural styles People from various backgrounds, as a result, often wear similar attire, making it challenging to accurately deduce one's culture based on clothing alone This is coupled with the fact that an individual's

character is a multifaceted concept that cannot be solely determined by their choice of clothing Personal values, beliefs, and life experiences play a crucial role

in shaping a person's character, and these factors cannot be accurately gauged by external appearances

In conclusion, although clothing choices can offer some insights into an

individual's cultural background and character, I believe they are not definitive indicators, given that the complexity of character and the influence of global fashion trends on clothing choices make it difficult to draw accurate conclusions about a person based solely on their attire

Overall band score 8.5 8+9+9+9

TR – Task Response nb – GRA and LR errors have not been corrected

Band score 8

Good answer, but your position could be more precisely defined See my

comments for details, but you showed that some types of attire do show a

person’s culture and character, although most don’t So, I think you missed the

opportunity to present a more convincing argument

The ideas are relevant, extended and there are no contradictions

Advice On Brainstorming For Task 2

As you’re planning and writing your answer, remember to constantly

ask yourself if you’re answering the question Check back to the

question a few times as you think of ideas to make sure they're

directly relevant

question

the question asks for solutions, in the plural, you must suggest at least 2

of the main body paragraphs, are directly relevant to the question

 Make sure your supporting ideas, which follow the main

ideas in the main body paragraphs, directly support the main idea

before, as there will always be important differences

that it is consistent with the ideas in the main bodies, and that it does not contradict the introduction

It is often believed that people's choice of clothing reveals significant information about their culture and character While clothing can offer certain clues, I am convinced that it is not a definitive indicator of a person's cultural background or personality [a]

On the one hand, it is understandable why some claim that individuals’ cultural backgrounds and personality traits can be reflected in their clothing choices[b] As for the former, traditional garments often reflect cultural heritage and values The Japanese kimono or Indian saree, for instance, are emblematic of their respective cultures In addition to this, an individual's clothing style can also reflect their personality traits, as seen in the way a preference for flamboyant attire normally indicates a confident, outgoing character Considering these factors, it is safe to say that people’s choices of clothing items are a reliable indicator of their culture and characters [c][d]

However, I am convinced that the aforementioned arguments are generally

questionable at best[e] The first reason is that the increasingly interconnected world we live in has led to the globalization of fashion trends, blurring the lines between distinct cultural styles[f] People from various backgrounds, as a result, often wear similar attire, making it challenging to accurately deduce one's culture based on clothing alone.[g] This is coupled with the fact that an individual's

character is a multifaceted concept that cannot be solely determined by their choice of clothing Personal values, beliefs, and life experiences play a crucial role

in shaping a person's character, and these factors cannot be accurately gauged by external appearances [h]

In conclusion, although clothing choices can offer some insights into an

individual's cultural background and character, I believe they are not definitive indicators, given that the complexity of character and the influence of global fashion trends on clothing choices make it difficult to draw accurate conclusions about a person based solely on their attire.[i]

C&C - Cohesion and Coherence nb GRA and LR errors have not been corrected

Band score 9

Excellent cohesion and coherence throughout, with no errors

The sentences have a natural flow characteristic of high band score answers

Paragraphing for Task 2

I recommend you write 4 paragraphs as follows:

After reading the introduction, the reader should have a

good idea what the essay is about, and what your position

(opinion) is It should be possible to write an introduction in

under 50 words It is not necessary to write a long

background statement

expand on the ideas sufficiently to persuade the examiner

that you’ve fully supported the main ideas If you write 3

main bodies, it is more difficult to expand and support them

sufficiently to get a high score

they’re given and write one paragraph per question

each paragraph should have a clear topic sentence and 2 or

more supporting ideas which support the topic sentence with reasons, evidence, and examples Do not waste time with

lots of background information

and the main ideas, and it should not introduce new ideas It should directly answer the question Do not leave the

examiner in any doubt about whether you’ve answered the

question

to clarify your position, make sure to give a good reason to

reject one of the sides If you just restated the original ideas

about one side, the examiner may decide you have covered

one side more than the other

extent question if you have main ideas which both agree and

disagree with the proposition Avoid short paragraphs, with

under 70 words, as it may be difficult to show a clear central

topic in a short paragraph.

It is often believed that people's choice of clothing reveals significant information about their culture and character While clothing can offer certain clues, I am convinced that it is not a definitive indicator of a person's cultural background or personality

On the one hand, it is understandable why some claim that individuals’ cultural backgrounds and personality traits can be reflected in their clothing choices[j] As for the former, traditional garments often reflect cultural heritage and values The Japanese kimono or Indian saree[k], for instance, are emblematic of their

respective cultures In addition to this, an individual's clothing style can also

reflect their personality traits, as seen in the way a preference for flamboyant attire normally indicates a confident, outgoing character Considering these

factors[l], it is safe to say that people’s choices of clothing items are a reliable indicator of their culture and characters [m]

However, I am convinced that the aforementioned arguments are generally

questionable at best[n] The first reason is that the increasingly interconnected world we live in has led to the globalization of fashion trends, blurring the lines between distinct cultural styles People from various backgrounds, as a result, often wear similar attire, making it challenging to accurately deduce one's culture based on clothing alone This is coupled with the fact that an individual's

character is a multifaceted concept that cannot be solely determined by their choice of clothing Personal values, beliefs, and life experiences play a crucial role

in shaping a person's character, and these factors cannot be accurately gauged by external appearances [o]

In conclusion, although clothing choices can offer some insights into an

individual's cultural background and character, I believe they are not definitive indicators, given that the complexity of character and the influence of global fashion trends on clothing choices make it difficult to draw accurate conclusions about a person based solely on their attire.[p]

LR- - Lexical resource nb Some GRA errors have not been corrected

Band score 9

Vocabulary is used accurately with sufficient flexibility to show precise meaning, with a wide variety of vocabulary, used accurately and with a high level of control

It is often believed that people's choice of clothing reveals significant information about their culture and character While clothing can offer certain clues, I am convinced that it is not a definitive indicator of a person's cultural background or personality

On the one hand, it is understandable why some claim that individuals’ cultural backgrounds and personality traits can be reflected in their clothing choices As for the former, traditional garments often reflect cultural heritage and values The Japanese kimono or Indian saree, for instance, are emblematic of their respective cultures In addition to this, an individual's clothing style can also reflect their personality traits, as seen in the way a preference for flamboyant attire normally indicates a confident, outgoing character Considering these factors, it is safe to say that people’s choices of clothing items are a reliable indicator of their culture and characters

However, I am convinced that the aforementioned arguments are generally

questionable at best The first reason is that the increasingly interconnected world we live in has led to the globalization [q]of fashion trends, blurring the lines between distinct cultural styles People from various backgrounds, as a result, often wear similar attire, making it challenging to accurately deduce one's culture based on clothing alone This is coupled with the fact that an individual's

character is a multifaceted concept that cannot be solely determined by their choice of clothing Personal values, beliefs, and life experiences play a crucial role

in shaping a person's character, and these factors cannot be accurately gauged by external appearances

In conclusion, although clothing choices can offer some insights into an

individual's cultural background and character, I believe they are not definitive indicators, given that the complexity of character and the influence of global fashion trends on clothing choices make it difficult to draw accurate conclusions about a person based solely on their attire

GRA – Grammatical range and accuracy nb Some LR errors have not been corrected

Band score 9

Grammar is used accurately with a wide variety of structures, which should be good for a band score 9

Punctuation is used correctly throughout

Appropriate structures are used throughout

It is often believed that people's choice of clothing reveals significant information about their culture and character While clothing can offer certain clues, I am convinced that it is not a definitive indicator of a person's cultural background or personality

On the one hand, it is understandable why some claim that individuals’ cultural backgrounds and personality traits can be reflected in their clothing choices As for the former, traditional garments often reflect cultural heritage and values The Japanese kimono or Indian saree, for instance, are emblematic of their respective cultures In addition to this, an individual's clothing style can also reflect their personality traits, as seen in the way a preference for flamboyant attire normally indicates a confident, outgoing character Considering these factors, it is safe to say that people’s choices of clothing items are a reliable indicator of their culture and characters

However, I am convinced that the aforementioned arguments are generally

questionable at best The first reason is that the increasingly interconnected world we live in has led to the globalization of fashion trends, blurring the lines between distinct cultural styles People from various backgrounds, as a result, often wear similar attire, making it challenging to accurately deduce one's culture based on clothing alone This is coupled with the fact that an individual's

character is a multifaceted concept that cannot be solely determined by their choice of clothing Personal values, beliefs, and life experiences play a crucial role

in shaping a person's character, and these factors cannot be accurately gauged by external appearances

In conclusion, although clothing choices can offer some insights into an

individual's cultural background and character, I believe they are not definitive indicators, given that the complexity of character and the influence of global fashion trends on clothing choices make it difficult to draw accurate conclusions about a person based solely on their attire